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Tweak says, "hmm"

Dorian Copperfield (boy_silhouette) wrote,
@ 2008-07-01 17:32:00

Current mood:	discontent
Entry tags:	alice, balam, blythe, henry, kain, l, mitch, poem, strix

Flames!
I wr-wrote a p-p-p-poem for mmmy friends. Everyone shares. Mmmme too! I l-learned mannny new words.......fffrom Frank's books. I wish t-to share mmmy wisdom. Some say, some ssay - dumb. I hope not. I have experience....yess? D-Does thisss make me d-dumb? Not sstupid, I hope.

Mmmy poem...I try....t-to keep Koh my jaw tight. I rehearsed.

Sunshine! Lights shine!
We come from specks.
Derivativessss, filaments
Undying solar ffflares.

BOOM!

We b-burst.
Ta da.

Looook! Sssecret page! Haha, I learn.

I....sssaw Balam. From the Bad P-Place. Keh. He was.....n-not bad like them. He isss still of evil, but he...cares. He ffflames. Like Mitch! BOOM.

And an owl. I ssay no more ...of her.

Offff to train! I come! I come!

Canto XIII(10-38), Dante's Inferno

Here nest the odious Harpies of whom my Master
wrote how they drove Aeneas and his companions
from the Strophades with prophecies of disaster.

Their wings are wide, their feet clawed, their huge bellies
covered with feathers, their necks and faces human.
The croak eternally in the unnatural trees.

"Before going on, I would have you understand,"
my Guide began, "we are in the second round
and shall be till we reach the burning sand.

Therefore look carefully and you will see
things in this wood, which, if I told them to you
would shake the confidence you have placed in me."

I heard cries of lamentation rise and spill
on every hand, but saw no souls in pain
in all that waste; and, puzzled, I stood still.

I think perhaps he thought I was thinking
those cries rose from among the twisted roots
through which the spirits of the damned were slinking

to hide from us. Therefore my Master said:
"If you break off a twig, what you will learn
will drive what you are thinking from your head."

Puzzled, I raised my hand a bit and slowly
broke off a branchlet from an enormous thorn:
and the great trunk of it cried: "Why do you break me?

And after blood had darkened all the bowl
of the wound, it cried again: "Why do you tear me?
Is there no pity left in any soul?

Men we were, and now we are changed to sticks;
well might your hand have been more merciful
were we no more than souls of lice and ticks."

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	luke_lawliet 2008-07-01 10:48 pm UTC (link)
	[audio recording] That's a wonderful poem, Dorian. I don't write poetry, but if I did, I'd hope that it was almost as good as yours. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-01 11:06 pm UTC (link)
	Hee! Thhhank you, b-brother! I try. Yess, no poetry? Oh, I can t-teach you ssssometime. Very simple. Some words....b-but all soul. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	luke_lawliet 2008-07-01 11:12 pm UTC (link)
	[audio recording] That's OK, I think it's really a case of, "you've got it, or you don't". But you have it, Dorian. It's quite good, and I know my poetry. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-02 12:23 am UTC (link)
	You d-don't g-g-got it? Ah! Thank you! You mmmmove us in spirit, in light. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	luke_lawliet 2008-07-02 09:54 pm UTC (link)
	[audio recording] sigh No. I... don't... got it. But you seem to, you know... I'd like to add that I would prefer if you tread cautiously around Niflheimers, regardless of how nice they seem. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-03 02:32 am UTC (link)
	I d-do? I shall write mmmmore then! Yes? D-D-Do you think.....they are aaaaall bad? Or that we think...they are aaaaaall b-bad? Like Shinnnnji! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	luke_lawliet 2008-07-03 02:35 am UTC (link)
	[audio recording] Hehe, yes, you should definitely write more, Dorian. I think... that some of them aren't all bad. Beyond that, I... I really can't judge. But don't get me started on Shinji... mumbles Doesn't read Dostoevsky... (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-03 02:39 am UTC (link)
	Okay! I wwwwwill! I will b-be.....t-trying more. Me too. We....nnnever know.....what one's soul...undernnnneath the surface...is. In hiding, t-tucked keh away. D-Different thoughts. Shhhould we mmmail him....the b-book so he c-c-c-can start? (Reply to this) (Parent)

	Filtered to Asgard holylance 2008-07-02 12:17 am UTC (link)
	That's a great poem. You met a man from Niflheim? He may have just been trying to trick you, Dorian. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	Re: Filtered to Asgard boy_silhouette 2008-07-02 12:25 am UTC (link)
	Yesss! Oh, thanksss! Hee! Nno....he...I would have known. There was ssincerity in his voice. Nnnnot his eyes. C-Could not ....hnnnnnsee them. He d-did want to.....k-k-keep me safe. Balam! (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	Re: Filtered to Asgard holylance 2008-07-02 04:11 am UTC (link)
	You're welcome. Really? Well, I'll trust your judgment. You still shouldn't go out on your own without telling anyone. I'll remember the name. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	Re: Filtered to Asgard boy_silhouette 2008-07-02 04:56 am UTC (link)
	I wwwon't. I just...hmmmwanted t-to train. Forest a no-no. Yess, do. We c-could.....sssend him a thank you nnnote. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	Re: Filtered to Asgard holylance 2008-07-02 07:40 pm UTC (link)
	Good. ...Yeah, a thank you note. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	[Filter to Asgard] pyro_madness 2008-07-02 12:50 am UTC (link)
	Hah, great poem, Dorian. Balam? He has fire powers, too? Heh, that's interesting. I'm glad he didn't hurt ya though, he coulda been dangerous! Owls are creepy. See ya at training! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	Re: [Filter to Asgard] boy_silhouette 2008-07-02 01:12 am UTC (link)
	Hee, thanks! Ammm t-turning my words innnto prose. Yes, so! Big BOOM.....annnd hmmmmmdown went t-tree. I d-don't know.....he mmmmeant no harm. Hidden sun? Yes. Yessss. B-Bye bye! See you too! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	{Filtered to Asgard} blind_oracle 2008-07-02 02:45 am UTC (link)
	You should...you should be careful, Dorian. He may be a good man, but anything is possible when it comes to those people. We wouldn't wish for anything bad to happen to you! And quite a poem, Dorian! How unique! (Reply to this) (Thread)

	Re: {Filtered to Asgard} boy_silhouette 2008-07-02 03:10 am UTC (link)
	B-B-But there was sssssomething there! Sssomething......hmmmabout him. Nnot like the others. ...No. No b-bad things to me. P-promise. Unique! Ahha! Yess...thank you! (Reply to this) (Parent)

	my_private_life 2008-07-02 07:39 pm UTC (link)
	That's really good, Dorian. Be careful, okay? (Reply to this) (Thread)

	Re: Filtered to Asgard boy_silhouette 2008-07-02 07:55 pm UTC (link)
	Yessss, thanks! Thankss! Okay, am c-c-carefu. Am nnnothing else. (Reply to this) (Parent)

	franksunderland 2008-07-03 03:33 pm UTC (link)
	That's a good poem, Dorian. I think... Judith would have enjoyed that poem. I have to second everyone else though... do be careful. But I trust you. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-03 07:40 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, yesss? Yes, thank you! Hmmm, I will....write a p-p-poem fffor Judith next. For her. You...hmmmmm....you t-trust me! You d-do? And yes? There isss trust? Oh me. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	franksunderland 2008-07-03 07:48 pm UTC (link)
	A poem for Judith? I... why... thank you, Dorian. [OOC: You brought tears to Frank's eyes again with that...] Yes, I do trust you. You're my friend. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-03 07:58 pm UTC (link)
	Yess! Hee, I try. I shooow you fffirst...when finished. Mmmmmy friend! My friend! Always am....ssso happy to hear this. {AN: It's totally mutual!} (Reply to this) (Parent)

	shabby_doll 2008-07-03 03:34 pm UTC (link)
	I like your poem. It's very... alive. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-03 07:41 pm UTC (link)
	Hee, thank you. It wasss the BOOM, yesss? {AN: Sorry for being so disasterously slow in responding to your email! I got it and will be replying shortly. Promise! =D} (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	shabby_doll 2008-07-03 07:50 pm UTC (link)
	Yes, I think it was definitely the BOOM. [OOC: No problem! I did wonder if you got it, but only because you said sometimes you don't get them, not because I thought you were being insanely slow.] (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-03 08:00 pm UTC (link)
	I m-made it b-b-big hoh on.....purpose. {AN: Yeah, I got it, no worries! I just get really weird about responding - I copy and paste on to Microsoft Word and everything, especially when they're longer. I'm ADD, so it takes me some time to read through them. No worries ^^.} (Reply to this) (Parent)

	cross_of_light 2008-07-04 07:42 pm UTC (link)
	You wrote such a wonderful poem! I adore it. It brings a smile to one's face and warms one's chest a little. I think it's the life and hop in it. (Reply to this) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-04 10:24 pm UTC (link)
	Oh, hee, thank you, Aaalice! Yessss, life! And...hop! Like a b-b-bunny. You bring lllight. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	cross_of_light 2008-07-05 12:31 am UTC (link)
	...hop! Oh, dear, I meant hope. Oh, well, I suppose it works out. Thank you, Dorian. (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	boy_silhouette 2008-07-05 02:33 am UTC (link)
	Ohhhh, hhhope too! Yess, hope too. Yes! How are...how are you? Are you d-doing well? {AN: Haha, I never knew you meant hope. I thought it was fitting both ways ^^} (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	Private to Dorian cross_of_light 2008-07-05 02:38 am UTC (link)
	I'm alright! How are you, Dorian? I'm helping Kain and Frank find horses! I'd say that publicly but I don't want to be responsible for anything happening to them if it reached eyes it shouldn't. [ooc: Then it was the perfect typo? XD It works out anyway, she could easily misspell a word by accident.] (Reply to this) (Parent) (Thread)

	Re: Private to Dorian boy_silhouette 2008-07-05 02:44 am UTC (link)
	Oooh, the horses! I c-can't wait t-t-to see them. When I t-t-train.....hnnnI shall see. Oh! Oh, okay. I ammmm...I am okay. Food, t-t-training. Lots of aaaactivvvities. (Reply to this) (Parent)